Daniel Goleman stated, “rational intelligence only contributes 20% to the factors that determine success in life…. and particularly the characteristics of emotional intelligence constitute the other 80%”, (as cited in “Nurturing emotional intelligence in university student” by Hang,C.C.1999.). It is true that students with high emotional intelligent (or Emotional Quotient, EQ for short) are able to achieve more in both academic and non-academic arenas.
Academically, students with high EQ are able to identify their priorities and understand their own feelings which make them flexible to work in a stressful condition. They study in a smart way by developing curiosities and interests in the subjects they study. Furthermore, they are always self-motivated and willing to travel extra miles than others.
Good interpersonal skill usually helps a person to learn more and efficiently. Outgoing personality makes them to participate in Co-curriculum activities (CCA for short) actively. They take the chances to make new friends, pick up new skills, develop leadership skill and have fun at the same time. Which will not only enhances their social life with meaningful activities but also reduce the stress of academic life at the same time. Apart from these, good communication skill helps them to learn more from other students, not just from lecturers.
Finally, I would like to conclude that with strong social network and good attitude toward the studies will eventually balance the life of undergraduates and transform them into successful men.
Academically, students with high EQ are able to identify their priorities and understand their own feelings which make them flexible to work in a stressful condition. They study in a smart way by developing curiosities and interests in the subjects they study. Furthermore, they are always self-motivated and willing to travel extra miles than others.
Good interpersonal skill usually helps a person to learn more and efficiently. Outgoing personality makes them to participate in Co-curriculum activities (CCA for short) actively. They take the chances to make new friends, pick up new skills, develop leadership skill and have fun at the same time. Which will not only enhances their social life with meaningful activities but also reduce the stress of academic life at the same time. Apart from these, good communication skill helps them to learn more from other students, not just from lecturers.
Finally, I would like to conclude that with strong social network and good attitude toward the studies will eventually balance the life of undergraduates and transform them into successful men.
2 comments:
Your general content is quite clear here, and I can see easily how you present two main points to support your topic sentence. There are a couple problems with language use though and with the development in general. First, if this is one paragraph, Sammy, then you should organize it as such with all sentence in a single body.
In addition, you need to be careful with nouns and their corresponding pronoun equivalents.
Look at this set of sentences:
"Good interpersonal skill usually helps a **person** to learn more and efficiently. Outgoing personality makes **them**...."
Do you see the problem?
In any case, thanks for your effort here.
I think your ideas are well organised and it improves a lot from your first draft :)
I got a question on your conclusion.
"Finally, I would like to conclude that with strong social network and good attitude toward the studies will eventually balance the life of undergraduates and transform them into successful men."
Why transform them into successful men but not women ? or men and women ? Look down to the women ?
Haha ... kidding ... u can use "person" instead of "men" :) just take note of it :)
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